Can I make a short film and break into the film industry?

During my rewrites I have decided that I would like to replace the gunplay in the film with fight scenes - as it will be simpler, not require as much editing, less violent (making it more appropriate for a school production) and most of all - more fun for those involved. I am a lifelong fan of martial arts movies and fight scenes so I have spent a lot of time in my life watching fight scenes religiously. However for the purpose of this EPQ I need to find out how to make one, to accomplish this I have watched a multitude of videos on this topic on youtube: From behind the scenes footage from martial arts films to martial arts demonstrations to get me well acquainted with fighting and how to film it. From my research I have concluded a fight scene need three things to be good. 1. Speed: A slow fight scene will be boring and will lose the audience very quickly whereas a fight scene that is fast and frenetic will keep the audience on the edge of their seats and swirl them along with the ac...

 After much deliberation I have decided to combine the first and second action plans for the script into one: In this second draft Paden and Ned will instead be respected members of Dennehy's crime syndicate who are retiring soon - Dennehy is displeased at this and so sends them on a suicide mission, promising them his farm if they come back alive. Surprisingly though the pair complete the mission however when they return Dennehy refuses to give them the barn and attempts to kill them himself. The assassination attempt fails however and the pair begin to rally support against Dennehy so they can claim what's theirs.   This draft will be a thriller comedy instead of a straight laced western utilising martial arts instead of guns In this second draft I will make sure to use slug lines more so the script can be more detailed and comprehensive as well as writing it on paper than transcribing it onto the PC so the quality of writing is better. To begin the draft I will construct a ...

 After a period of working I have finally created a first draft for the script. Upon studying it I have found that I was reasonably satisfied with some parts (the characters of Dennehy, Oliver and Jakeman) while other parts needed more work (The character of Paden and his interactions with Ned). Below I have done a more comprehensive evaluation: Pros: -Dennehy is a fun and enjoyable yet hateable villain -Oliver and Jakeman's conversation in the woods and character in general turned out very well. -The shot ideas and transitions were quite creative. -The story is short and sweet -A number of the scenes were very creative - such as the final scene or the scene of Ned opening the door Cons: -Paden so far is a bland character who is lacking in a motivation -Paden and Ned's friendship feels wooden and forced Considering these points I can conclude that Paden (and to a lesser extent Ned) is the weakest link in the film - to remedy this I have come up with a number of ideas with which...